Six Common Mistakes Writers Make
We're going to blast through six common and easily fixable mistakes. These will not take care of all your issues as a writer but don't commit any of these crimes. Because if you do, if you are one of those people and I'm sure they are many of you in this room and home. Who eventually want to eventually or right away, send a manuscript off to an agent, a publisher. If you have any of these mistakes in your writing. Red Flag, red flag, red flag. Here we go, and they are so easy to fix. The deadliest verb in he english language, well maybe the agent will let some of this go by but not some of the other ones. To be, it's such a useful, important verb but it gets so overused in your writing. Vanessa was worried that her daughter had been taking drugs because she used to be an addict. Was worried, had been taking, used to be. One sentence, three different forms of the to be verb. A producer also said used to be an addict? Hmm. Anyway, that's another issue. As a recovering addict, Vanessa wor...
ried about her daughter's drug use. No, no to be verb whatsoever. I was happy that he was going to be back. I was happy he was going to be back. Three uses of to be in one sentence. I felt happy about his return. Very often, you will find yourselves creating a kind of muscle in your sentence, when you take out to be. Because you will be giving active verbs instead of state of being. The least dramatic verb tense. It's called the imperfect tense. They don't actually teach the names of tenses so much anymore. Unless you're studying a foreign language. It's the ongoing past. "He would accuse me of sneaking around with his best friend." He would accuse me, you know how I've been talking about you know, could you draw a picture? Could you make a movie of He would accuse me? It's an ongoing action, it happens many times, it's not dramatic. He accused me of sneaking around. Maybe it happened 20 times, but tell me about one. "She would run up thousands of dollars on her charge card." She ran up thousands of dollars on her charge card. "I would finish off two bottles of wine every night." Easy. I finished off two bottles of wine every night.
We did have a question from CJ that was going back to sentence rhythm--
Maybe I get to repeat Goodnight Moon again. (laughter) And everybody will be asleep.
And the idea was, the person has a musical sense, or feel like she's writing a lot of rhythm. Can there be too much rhythm?
No, I don't think so, I don't think so. I think that's her style. No.
I mean, I don't want you to just fall in love with rhythm for no point, it's rhythm in the service of story. It's, all of it is in the service of story. Story first.
Awesome. Let's keep going--
The passive voice. This is a phrase that gets said so much, and by the most well intentioned people, after somebody dies, of course. "She will be missed." I see it always in obituaries, and I wanna say, I want to acknowledge who's doing the missing. I don't want it to be out there floating. I will miss her. Feel the difference between those two sentences? "A trip to Paris was taken." (laughter) We traveled to Paris. Adverbs and Exclamation Points. If you go back now, as a graduate of this class, and start looking at all the writers you love, count the adverbs in their work, they barely exist, they barely exist. You might here a suddenly or a finally now and then, but words that actually describe how somebody does something are, they're basically the cheap and easy way to get a point across that you should be getting across in your storytelling and your description. She wept mournfully. She wept. He danced gracefully. He danced. Or describe, if he's not a particularly graceful dancer, describe what his dancing looked like. Don't rely on the adverb, the LY word to do all your work for you. They read voraciously. They read. Exclamation point. Cheapest trick in the book (laughter). I want to be a really powerful writer, I want to say how much I, how strongly this affected me. How deeply I was wounded. I think I'll put an exclamation point at the end of the sentence. The felt great! (laughter) They felt great. (laughter) Okay, enough said on that one. Oh, it's and its. I know nobody in this room would make this mistake, but some people do. Very, very simple. It's a wonderful day in the neighborhood. A contraction, it is. The cat licked its paw. Possessives. Jane's, Mary's, Jasmine's, all have apostrophe S, but if it's it, it does not. Very simple. (laughter) This is a moment when I honor my mother who would roll over in her grave is she knew what had happened to lie and lay. And you can, you hear it on television, on the newscasters, you read it in books, writers that I have respected make this mistake. My children, who I love dearly. Lie and lay. Okay, we have a quiz. What do you do in a hammock?
[Female Audience Member] Lay.
Lie. What do you call it when a person tells an untruth?
That was an easy one. The thing to remember is, lay is what is called a transitive verb. You have to lay something. You can't just lay. Except as a past tense of lie. Okay. What does a person say if she set a baby into her crib today? Lay. What does a person say if she set a baby into her crib yesterday? Laid. What does a chicken do with eggs?
Lay. What does a person say if he wants to explain he had sex? We all know that one--
[ Audience Member] He got laid.
Okay. Lay in the hammock, lay on the beach, that's the one. You didn't lay on the beach. Unless it was yesterday. She, I'm gonna lie on the beach. Yesterday I lay on the beach. He had lain on the beach.